15 January 2009

An Obtuse Angel

Graffiti skies seem far too distant, an angel nearly naked without wings;

Heaven rejects, quite barely reflects; and its Hell that acceptance brings.

A decision made, without the faculties of choice - freedom is never free;

Evil shall embrace the child of scorn, the angel who would rather not be.


Priority corrupted, propriety confused, an angel then succumbs to doubt;

Barred are the doors to Heaven, and just as heartlessly, Hell reaches out.

Mortification may be masked as mercy, amnesty accompanied by abuse;

An offer hardly ever meant to oblige, an angel who just could not refuse.


Each breath reeks of sin - somewhere, somewhat, an angel somehow fell;

Heaven’s outcast is wretched, and condemned to the many curses of Hell.

The divine be damned, when wilting whites wane amidst a beastly black;

Conceived courtesy cosmic conflict, is the angel who could not turn back.


Deserted by discretion – if unable to stay, an angel yet unwilling to leave;

Heaven learns to punish, and in reciprocation, Hell administered reprieve.

As a testimony from torment, deliberating against those afraid to commit;

Promoting a sense of prejudice unbiased, the angel who would not submit.


With wisps of wile, then tendrils of tact - accommodate an angel aberrant;

Heaven could believe elsewise, and rightfully, but Hell is astutely adamant.

Distorted, distracted, distended; psyched beyond these confines of regret;

Amidst those that struggle to remember, is this angel who could not forget.


The renegade will resist the rigours of religion - an angel immune to belief;

Heaven shall then cry tears of tribulation, and Hell ought to celebrate grief.

The want of a faith without even believing, is more impulsive than implied;

Exploiting the potence of every shadow, is an angel who shall not confide.


Alone, and in more than just every sense of the word - an angel set apart;

I really ought to have expected the otherwise, rather than blame my heart.

Struggling to look beyond the obvious, even beneath the supposedly true;

Searching within, eyes forced shut, an angel who would find none but you.



By:

Sarthak Prakash

3 comments:

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  2. Sarthak

    Have been following your blogs.

    My Thoughts On This Piece:

    * Wise and correct usage of words...

    * When read at a go.. dsnt really make much sense.. smhw I feel ur thoughts don't stream.

    * The best quality of a writer/poet is engripping the reader with the text and conveying ideas/ thoughts that can be felt. It's like a heart to heart conversation.

    *Poems need to have a good flow and shouldn't hv distractions. In this case, I was distracted.
    Coherence of thoughts is missing. (Honest, first hand confession.)

    Take it in the right spirit. Looking forward to your next piece.

    All the best.

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  3. it is wonderful. especially when u leave a guy barely saying mihir bhaiyya properly and 14yrs years later he is spilling the most beautiful word art.
    since writing exceeds every other method of communication becos the writer can bake an image in his mind and decorate it with his imagination, im sure im not the 1st or last one to tell u that u r one of the best bakers in town.
    and ur quality definetly comes from the fact that you ease your way into others thoughts mostly using sarcasm.
    and also the fact that ur 'cake' if i may say so while tasting minty to me is playing spicy on the previous bloggers mouth.
    that your thoughts are not additive in nature saves you from becomin a politician and drives u more towards a genuine writers style.
    ur style is well appreciated and deviations from ur sarcastic approach to others like anger, romance and genuine comedy will be most awaited for...
    and trust me on the coherence issue... the more vivid wild and choatic ur thoughts are , the more r ur chances of creating ur masterpiece...
    Atleast thats what God did... :-)

    mihir mohan

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